As the boat is moving side to side my head hits a box and luggage. People are talking, snoring, walking and sleeping.
Babies are crying. People are shaking full of hunger. Dead rats and cockroaches crawling. As kids hit their head on the hard wooden ground.The kids cry so they can go home, as parents saying to the kids "it is for your own good." People sitting in dark corners that smell like B.O.
Asinate, you have begun to develop a creative piece of writing. I love some of your imagery - "people are shaking full of hunger" paints an image of a large tummy filled with air/nothing (starvation.) I think your ideas could be extended and developed to create a very moving response to this picture.
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